The detective's motivation is weak. That he was curious doesn't seem like enough to outweigh the objections he voiced earlier.
Aaron Ross Powell
· 1 year ago
Thanks for the feedback, George. I think you may be right on this one, though I'll need to think about it a bit more. Of of the interesting things I've come across while writing is the disconnect between the characters in my head (where I'm wholly aware of their inner workings -- sort of) and on the page, where only their language and descriptive text shows their motivations. What makes sense to me doesn't necessarily make sense on the page.
I'll keep this in mind when I head back -- eventually -- for the second draft.
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one, though I'll need to think about it a bit more. Of of the
interesting things I've come across while writing is the disconnect
between the characters in my head (where I'm wholly aware of their
inner workings -- sort of) and on the page, where only their language
and descriptive text shows their motivations. What makes sense to me
doesn't necessarily make sense on the page.
I'll keep this in mind when I head back -- eventually -- for the
second draft.